So I’m reading this story at Lightspeed, and the following sentence stabs me in the eyeball:
Now Lvov could see the Interface itself, the terminus of the wormhole: The Interface was a blue-white tetrahedron, an angular cage that exploded at her from infinity.
The bolding is mine, and I use it to highlight a phrase that bothered me to no end when I read it. (You can tell that I was bothered because I stopped reading to write this blog post.) My problem is what the hell does that mean? It’s an evocative turn of phrase, all right, but it doesn’t do one thing to actually help me see, hear, or feel whatever it is our poor protagonist Lvov is seeing.
Writers: don’t do this. Your metaphors can be awesome and all, but they had better mean something.